Comments on: NaNoWriMo 2007: Drawing Back the Curtain, Part 3 - Plot http://kjtoo.com/2007/11/05/nanowrimo-2007-pulling-back-the-curtain-part-3-plot/ Kris Johnson's Weblog Thu, 20 Nov 2008 11:04:27 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.6.3 By: KJToo http://kjtoo.com/2007/11/05/nanowrimo-2007-pulling-back-the-curtain-part-3-plot/#comment-40206 KJToo Tue, 06 Nov 2007 14:44:34 +0000 http://kjtoo.com/2007/11/05/nanowrimo-2007-pulling-back-the-curtain-part-3-plot/#comment-40206 While the connection between cities exists for secret (and what some would surely consider sinister) purposes, the organization did not go through such great lengths to establish these arcane passageways simply for the purposes of murder. The individual using the passageways is not a member of the secret society, but rather someone who has learned of the organization's existence and has managed to learn of the methods used to travel between the cities and has turned them to sinister purposes. As for the street name, whether it actually exists in all of those cities doesn't really matter to me; it does in the story. It's a common enough name that I've seen it in several cities, but not common enough that it is a main thoroughfare. While the connection between cities exists for secret (and what some would surely consider sinister) purposes, the organization did not go through such great lengths to establish these arcane passageways simply for the purposes of murder. The individual using the passageways is not a member of the secret society, but rather someone who has learned of the organization’s existence and has managed to learn of the methods used to travel between the cities and has turned them to sinister purposes.

As for the street name, whether it actually exists in all of those cities doesn’t really matter to me; it does in the story. It’s a common enough name that I’ve seen it in several cities, but not common enough that it is a main thoroughfare.

]]> By: Rob http://kjtoo.com/2007/11/05/nanowrimo-2007-pulling-back-the-curtain-part-3-plot/#comment-40181 Rob Tue, 06 Nov 2007 13:52:48 +0000 http://kjtoo.com/2007/11/05/nanowrimo-2007-pulling-back-the-curtain-part-3-plot/#comment-40181 Interesting. Two random thoughts. Why not change Ridgebury Lane to a street name that we know all major cities have? Like First Street or Washington Boulevard or something like that? Ridgebury Lane doesn't sound like the kind of street you'd find in all these cities. (Yes, Main Street would be almost TOO easy!) Also, the idea of the connection between these cities is great but why would the secret society bother opening up such a connection just to go around killing people? Perhaps this will be answered in your book but just wanted to give you a heads up that this is what the reader will be wondering. It's a shame these secret powers are always used for killing people and such, ha ha. Methinks the secret society has been overdone lately but perhaps you can give it a new twist. Please, no Stonecutters, no Knights Templar, no Freemasons or any of that jive. I swear, if you end up with an albino in this book . . . . Interesting. Two random thoughts. Why not change Ridgebury Lane to a street name that we know all major cities have? Like First Street or Washington Boulevard or something like that? Ridgebury Lane doesn’t sound like the kind of street you’d find in all these cities. (Yes, Main Street would be almost TOO easy!)

Also, the idea of the connection between these cities is great but why would the secret society bother opening up such a connection just to go around killing people? Perhaps this will be answered in your book but just wanted to give you a heads up that this is what the reader will be wondering. It’s a shame these secret powers are always used for killing people and such, ha ha.

Methinks the secret society has been overdone lately but perhaps you can give it a new twist. Please, no Stonecutters, no Knights Templar, no Freemasons or any of that jive. I swear, if you end up with an albino in this book . . . .

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